This is a line by line break down of the poem 'The Dearth Bed' and what I want to happen for each line.
I want to start the story off with David (Main Character) getting out of a car and going into a pub. He walks all the way through the pub to the back. I want to use POV shots of David as well as MCU's and CUs to establish who and what the David is like. He walks out back to the outside part of the pub and meets him friends. They have fun drinking telling stories and laughing, this lead to them all stud up talking. As one of his friends goes to the bar, a guy (Darren) comes up from behind David and stabs him in the side. As he stabs him all you see in the hand go in and a gold ring which he is wearing. Everything goes quite.
The poem starts, 'He drowsed and was aware of silence heaped. Round him, unshaken as the steadfast walls' During this I want a POV (black and white, slightly slow mo) shot of David looking round, no one has noticed yet, not even himself still in shock from it.
(Next Line) 'Aqueous like floating rays of amber light, Soaring and quivering in the wings of sleep.' Druing the next lines I want a MCU or CU of David, his eyes start closing, head wobbling. Then to a POV of David (B&W) he looks round as his head wobbles, his friend(Sarah) see his fro the bar, she starts noticing that somethings wrong.
(Next Line) Silence and safety; and his mortal shore, Lipped by the inward, moonless waves of death. From this I want, POV of David (B&W) looking at Sarah, she still looks worried, he starts to fall and you see Sarah run over. Wide shot of David falling, people start to notice and gather round.
'Someone was holding water to his mouth. He swallowed, unresisting; moaned and dropped' David is on the floor, with people and his friends around him. One of him friends (Mike) is holding his head on his knee, he has Davids head in one hand and water in the other. Other people are holding towels on his wound applying pressure. David drinks the water from Mike.
(Next Line) 'Through crimson gloom to darkness; and forgot. The opiate throb and ache that was his wound.' In this part I want, David finishes drinking, a shot of Mike as he looks pleased as if progress has been made. David tilts his head back and slightly down, he looks at the guy holding his wound. POV (B&W) of David looking at the guy holding his wound, his vision getting fussy and things getting darker. He follows the guys arm down to his wound, as the guys hands come slightly up, you see blood pouring out (Blood in colour), his head tilts back up.
(Next Line) 'Water-calm, sliding green above the weir. Water-a sky-lit alley for his boat, Bird- voiced, and bordered with reflected flowers.' With this I want, David to have his head tilted back almost falling unconscious, but this is interrupted by Mike as he makes him have another drink. Cut to CU of David drinking, then to a POV (B&W) of David looking at the glass. CU shot of Mike nodding again, then David stops drinking. POV (B&W) of David as he looks up at Mike, he looks at Mikes flower pin in this shirt (Pin in colour).
(Next Lines) 'And shaken hues of summer; drifting down, He dipped contented oars, and sighed, and slept.' After David looks at the flower pin, his head slips down, CU shot of Mike looking panicked. POV (B&W) of David looking down, his eyes start shutting and everything is getting darker. Mike lays him down, saying encouraging things at him. CU shot of David as he tries to stay awake but becomes unconscious.
(Next Lines) 'Night, with a gust of wind, was in the ward, Blowing the curtain to a glimmering curve.' In this part I want a wide shot of David laid on a black floor, all dark, goes to a Mid shot of David laid down. A gust of wind blows David's shirt.
'Night. He was blind; he could not see the stars. Glinting among the wraiths of wandering cloud' With these line I want, a mid shot of David laid down, you can see the space above him, clouds start to appear, then starts. (Next Lines) 'Queer blots of colour, purple, scarlet, green, Flickered and faded in his drowning eyes.' I then want blots of colours flash over him. CU of Davids face, then extreme CU of Davids eyes, as the colours flicker over them.
(Next Lines) 'Rain-he could hear it rustling through the dark; Fragrance and passionless music woven as one' In this part I want a wide shot of David laid on grass in the middle of a forest. Extreme CU shot of rain drops fall on his hand, as quite windy music/soundtrack starts to play in the background.
(Next Lines) 'Warm rain on drooping roses; pattering showers. That soak the woods; not the harsh rain that sweeps' Mid shot of David, more rain falls on his face,
(Next Lines) 'Behind the thunder, but a trickling peace, Gently and slowly washing life away.' For this part I want to have thunder sounds, while the rain gets heavier.
(Next Lines) 'He stirred, shifting his body; then the pain.Leapt like a prowling beast, and gripped and tore. His groping dreams with grinding claws and fangs.' When these lines come up I want to have, a mid shot David still laid on the floor, he moves a little and the pain from his wound kicks in and wakes him up and looks around scared.
(Next Lines) 'But someone was beside him; soon he lay. Shuddering because that evil thing had passed.' MCU shot of David sitting up holding his wound tight. A dark shadow passes from behind him and starts whispering. David lays back down with a scared look on his face.
(Next Lines) 'And death, who’d stepped toward him, paused and stared.' With this part I want the shadow to go in front of David, POV of the shadow (through tights on lens) looking down at David. David looks back scared, the shadow then covers the screen.
(Next Lines) 'Light many lamps and gather round his bed. Lend him your eyes, warm blood, and will to live.' In this part I want to got to a shot of David unconscious in a hospital bed. A CU shot of David's friend's hand turning the lamp next to the bed on. A MCU of a doctor looking at David'c chart, then a POV of the doctor looks at the charts. A mid shot of a drip with a blood pack which is attached to David, then a CU of David's friend holding his hand.
(Next Lines) 'Speak to him; rouse him; you may save him yet. He’s young; he hated War; how should he die. When cruel old campaigners win safe through?' In this part I want to have a MCU of David as his eyes slightly open, then a POV of David with a mid shot of Davids friend trying to talk to David, then same POV of David but with the doctor holding up some fingers, as Davids eyes close again. A CU of Davids peace tattoo.
(Next Line) 'But death replied: ‘I choose him.’ So he went' Death appear in the back of the hospital bedroom, he is looking a David. The camera pans behind him, when it reaches the other side of him David is laying down in the forest. Mid shot of David as he gets up slowly and still holding his wound, and walks forward passed the camera.
(Next Line) 'And there was silence in the summer night' Mid shot of David walking forward, he then comes to a shot, he in staring at something. The camera pans round to behind David's head, we then go to a POV shot of David looking at a TV screen, the screen is showing static imagery. CU of the screen as it starts showing film. (Flashback) You see a video of David driving a year ago, and as he's driving, up the road you see a couple dancing, the couple are stood at the edge of the pavement, as Ruby twirls and heads towards the road, Darren lights a cigarette. David drives closes as he nearly gets to where the couple are he becomes distracted and looks away fro the road. Ruby steps onto the road, the car hits her, David stops as Ruby hits the pavement. David looks back at the girl, he then decides to drive off. Darren runs over to Ruby and holds her head, he's full of anger and sorrow, he looks over at David's car and notes down the license plate. CU shot of Darren's face, full of anger and sorrow.
(Next Line) 'Silence and safety; and the veils of sleep.' A CU shot of David's face, he's all upset, crying and afraid. MCU shot of death as he points at David.
(Final Line) 'Then, far away, the thudding of the guns.' Wide shot of Death slowly walking towards him, covering the screen the whole screen. Wide shot of David in hospital, CU shot of the David's life monitor as it beeps, each beep sounds a little like a gun shot, when finally it flat lines. Fade to black
By creating this break down, I feel that i'm more prepared to write my script and have a more concrete story planned. This has helped me to picture each shots and scenes in full detail, as I've added detailed description in each sections.
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